摘要：编辑解读：在编辑英文稿件时，我们常常发现，尽管稿件经过AI软件的语言润色，且语法检查工具给出了高达9分（满分10分）的评分，经过以英语为母语的同领域专家审阅后，仍会进行大幅修改。这一现象的根源在于，AI软件的评估主要依赖于语法检查，只要符合语法规则就能获得高分

润色专家意见: "It is worth noting that SCFA transporters and receptors are also present in the ENS" "It is worth noting that," as it is redundant and does not add value.

译文: "It is worth noting that" 这句话显得冗余，并没有增加价值。

编辑解读：在编辑英文稿件时，我们常常发现，尽管稿件经过AI软件的语言润色，且语法检查工具给出了高达9分（满分10分）的评分，经过以英语为母语的同领域专家审阅后，仍会进行大幅修改。这一现象的根源在于，AI软件的评估主要依赖于语法检查，只要符合语法规则就能获得高分。然而，优秀的英文写作不仅要学术严谨，更需语言表达清晰简洁。因此，稿件的质量评估不能仅停留在语法层面，而应关注语言的流畅性和逻辑性。一篇AI评分很高的稿件，其英文写作是否真的优秀，通常可以从以下几个方面进行评估，这些也是专家审阅时语言修改的重点：

1. 避免冗余表达：在写作中，尽量避免使用“it has been reported that,” “it is observed that,” “it was demonstrated that”等表达方式，因为它们通常不提供额外的信息。可以直接陈述事实或结果，以提高句子的直接性。

例如，

"It has been shown to restore the mammalian target of rapamycin signaling…"→"It restores…"

"It was reported that the expression levels of HSP22, pAMPK/AMPK, and PGC1α were significantly increased 24 hours after SAH in animal experiments." →"Animal experiments showed that the expression levels of HSP22, pAMPK/AMPK, and PGC1α were significantly increased 24 hours after SAH."

2. 使用主动语态：尽量使用主动语态而非被动语态。主动语态通常更简洁有力，使读者更容易理解。

例如，

"A study by...demonstrated that…" →"Vicentini et al. (2021) found that…"

"A significant correlation was observed" → "…revealed a significant association"以增强句子的主动性和精准性。

"Propionate has been shown to reduce colonic motility" → "Propionate reduces colonic motility"。"…has been shown to reduce…"显得冗余且被动, "…reduces…"表达更为直接。

"As observed by Yao Shi and colleagues in vitro…" → "In vitro, Yao Shi et al. observed…"

3. 精简表达：在写作时，寻找可以删除或合并的多余词汇。使用简洁的词语和句子结构，使文章更易于阅读和理解。

例如，

"In our review, we examined the existing literature on" →"This review examines…"

"It is worth noting that the composition of gut microbiota is linked with various clinical features in PD..." → "Gut microbiota composition is linked to various clinical features of PD..."

"After a 2-year follow-up of the included PD patients, it was observed that"这句话显得冗长，简化为"A 2-year follow-up of PD patients showed" 这样更直接地传达相同的意思。

"…create a conducive environment for the ENS to be exposed to…"→ "…expose the ENS to..."

"Further analysis of the correlation between SCFAs and clinical characteristics in PD patients has shown" →"Further analysis reveals" 将"has shown"（现在完成时）替换为"reveals"（一般现在时），使表达更加直接。

"Warranting further study" 比 "warrant further investigation in future research" 更简洁因为"further investigation" 和 "future research" 是多余的。

"Did not exhibit statistically significant correlations with" → "found no such correlations at" "No such correlations" 有效地指代之前提到的负相关，使句子更流畅。

"Evidence from patient data and animal models indicates that…"→ "Patient and animal model data suggest…"

"Leading to the formation of "→" promoting"避免冗余并改善句子的流畅性。

"Exerts beneficial effects that protect" → "promotes" 使句子更加流畅, 表达更加直接。

"Displayed a higher number of activated microglia" → "increased microglial activation"；"Provide protective effects against" → "protect against" 简化表达, 但没有改变原意。

"The hypothesis regarding their anti-neuroinflammatory properties continues to hold promise" → "Their anti-neuroinflammatory potential in PD remains promising" 修改后表达更加简洁明确，且更具学术性。

4. 直接引用数据和证据：在陈述结果时，直接引用数据和证据，而不是使用模糊的表达方式。可以直接说明“X实验显示Y结果”，而不是说“有研究表明Y结果”。

例如，

"Research has indicated that a balanced diet is beneficial." → "Johnson and Lee (2022) demonstrated that a balanced diet reduced the risk of chronic diseases by 30%."

"Evidence suggests that stress management techniques can be effective." → "Patel et al. (2019) showed that participants who practiced mindfulness meditation experienced a 50% reduction in stress levels."

5.清晰定义术语：在使用特定术语或概念时，确保对其进行清晰定义，避免使用模糊不清的表达，确保读者能够准确理解。

例如，

"…while the submucosal plexus influences mucosal electrolyte flow, hormone secretion, and the permeability of intestinal epithelial cells…" 这里的 "influences"一词不够准确，建议明确说明是如何影响黏膜的电解质流动、激素分泌及肠道上皮细胞通透性，是促进还是抑制? 突出需要澄清的重点，使内容更具吸引力。

"GLP-1 also plays a critical role in gastrointestinal motility" → "GLP-1 also regulates…"，这样表达更清楚。

"…has a protective effect on neurobehavioral disorders…" → "…improved neurobehavioral disorders…" 修改后使表达更加明确。

6. 专业术语的使用

例如，

"The muscular layer of the intestinal wall （肠壁的肌肉层）" → "the intestinal muscular layer (肠肌层)"。

"Various immune cells in the gut" → "gut immune cells"， 后者表达更直接。

7. 逻辑结构：确保文章的逻辑结构清晰，每个段落都有明确的主题句，并且各段落之间有良好的过渡，以增强整体连贯性。

来源：中国神经再生研究杂志